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Precious Cargo Or: What's a Meal Between Preds?
The Adventures of Elle, Part III

F/(F+) GTS (Macro/Micro) Vore, Soft Digestion
Elle and Crisis enjoy an afternoon together.

This third installment in Elle's ongoing adventures continues her encounter with the naga Crisis on Felarya. This story has taken longer to finish than probably any other I've done, and has seen significant rewrites over the years. I'm eternally thankful to my buddy Karbo for being a true friend and pointing out to me all the shortcomings of the original draft. If you like this story, you owe much of it to him.

Read the story on my site: [link]
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*PrinnyDood-Abides Feb 1, 2012
Read this a while ago when Karbo put the corresponding picture up, but didn't know there was a place I could comment! Huzzah!! :D

As an ardent supporter of catgirls, F/F, and large numbers of prey, this was very relevant to my interests, and somewhat inspiring in fact. :meow:

You portrayed the contrast between the predator's and prey's perspective on the situation quite well, and the descriptive language was solid throughout. The machinations on the human side were interesting, and the way you spliced the scenes between that and the catgirl massacre (:XD:) going on helped keep either from getting to be too much.

The ending was quite a surprise, and really left the reader hanging; hopefully you'll continue the story.
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~ElPortero Feb 1, 2012
Thanks, man! The feedback is much appreciated!

I have the outline for the next story all laid out, just waiting for life to allow me time to write all the words that flesh it out!

The next two stories are going to end up being my favorite of the bunch, I think, just because of the cool elements I am going to be able to bring into play. Hopefully you (and others) will agree!
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*PrinnyDood-Abides Feb 3, 2012
I know that feeling! Life can be so uncooperative sometimes. :XD:

Glad to hear more is in the works, even if real life is slowing you down currently.
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~Esternkiddo Dec 17, 2011
When will the story continue? Can hardly wait!
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~ElPortero Dec 20, 2011
I've got the whole thing outlined, I just need to have life let up enough so that I can dedicate the time to write it!
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~Esternkiddo Dec 22, 2011
Oh, I see. ^^
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~HirohitotheLegend Dec 4, 2010
Excellent story. Funny too. I found your stuff from one of your friends who is the maker of the Frey (can't spell it) series. Be sure to look at my DA. I'm working on a story of my own. Nothing like this though. This is unique.

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~Honnoh Nov 11, 2010
OK, Fine! I'll owe ANYBODY! Your story is superb, your characters alive and deep....and in Karbo... (I was thinking of putting in a cool Latin word or two but would probably screw it up like when I was in Thailand and asked to young girls for "mothers milk" instead of water! I used a rising tone...total red face!) Can't wait for the next install. Thanks much!
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~david-dent-jedai Nov 9, 2010
This was hillarous! Love the way your using eliments and characters from all of your stories to build the drama and supense. Though I'm worried about Elle, which is weird since I know she wouldn't return the setiment. ^^; Seriously I'm hooked keep writing!

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~ElPortero Nov 10, 2010
If you think this story had drama and suspense, wait until you see the next two. I've got the first one outlined and it's going to be so much fun to write.

And you should well be worried about Elle. Shit is gonna happen, my friend.
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